My passage was from Never Let Me Go by Kazuo Ishiguro.
My recording is here http://vocaroo.com/i/s02m9pGvQpwP
Criterion A:6- I think that my commentary shows adequate knowledge and understanding of the text and my comments are generally supported by the text because I describe how Tommy's theory about deferral is the first example of a positive future, but some of the language serves as negative foreshadowing for later events.
Criterion B:6- I describe literary features, but I think my description of their effects on the readers is a little unclear/lacking at times.
Criterion C:3-I did okay with the organization, doing it by device. But I think at the end of each little section, I struggled with transitioning and wrapping up my thoughts.
Criterion D:3-My language is appropriate but less sophisticated and eloquent than I'd prefer.
Total: 18/30
